Tuesday, November 3, 2009

Teaser Tuesday

Thanks to everyone who commented!


10 comments:

Paranormalchick said...

OMG!!! I have to know what happened out there in the snow?!?!! What attacked them?? I love that last line, such a cliff hanger. I'm hooked! Great snip!

VĂ©ro said...

From what I've read so far, this is one of my favorite parts of Unthawed!

It's really disturbing.

Deniz Kuypers said...

Awesome teaser. I like your writing, plus it's very suspenseful. The last paragraph, ending in "dead," was great!

Becca said...

Dude. I LOVE your descriptions.

/story

:)

Karla said...

Your descriptions are amazing! AHH! Cliffhanger! Beautiful writing too. Nice!

J.S. Wood said...

Hooked - beautiful, and eerie descriptions. Excellent!

Stephanie said...

Oh, wow. This was great. Your writing is awesome and your descriptions are wonderful. Great teaser!

AggieW3thrGirl said...

I'm not sorry you didn't post dialog, because this was just beautiful in a really scary sort of way. :) I love the last full paragraph with the short not-quite-sentences. Brilliant!

Amna said...

You tease!
Again, beautifuly written!
Very hooking aswell.

corrinejackson said...

Like the berry juice metaphor. Something so innocent compared to something so horrific. Jars you, which is what I think you intended.