Thanks to everyone who commented!
OMG!!! I have to know what happened out there in the snow?!?!! What attacked them?? I love that last line, such a cliff hanger. I'm hooked! Great snip!
From what I've read so far, this is one of my favorite parts of Unthawed!It's really disturbing.
Awesome teaser. I like your writing, plus it's very suspenseful. The last paragraph, ending in "dead," was great!
Dude. I LOVE your descriptions./story :)
Your descriptions are amazing! AHH! Cliffhanger! Beautiful writing too. Nice!
Hooked - beautiful, and eerie descriptions. Excellent!
Oh, wow. This was great. Your writing is awesome and your descriptions are wonderful. Great teaser!
I'm not sorry you didn't post dialog, because this was just beautiful in a really scary sort of way. :) I love the last full paragraph with the short not-quite-sentences. Brilliant!
You tease!Again, beautifuly written!Very hooking aswell.
Like the berry juice metaphor. Something so innocent compared to something so horrific. Jars you, which is what I think you intended.
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