ohhhh I love the fire reference!!!
Oooooh nice K!!! And when you need a beta ;)
This captures a teenage girls feelings perfectly! So innocent and new while exciting.
<3 this line:"I mean, I try to stay away from being on fire."Hee hee hee.
Love all the inner talk about the fire and how she's feeling and how it's new. This was such a throwback to my teen years! Ok, well, maybe I didn't get kissed like that as a teen, but the excitement was there!
Ah, I love this! You can feel the sexual tension between the MC and Grayson and I love a confident guy. Perfect.
Dude. I love how he's overly confident. "You're welcome." BAHAHAHAAnd I loved the "This sounded so much less lame in my head" line. :D
Really good kiss scene. I'm pretty sure I could feel it too =]
This was fun! And really enjoyed your MC's voice--very teen and uncertain! :)
This is such a sweet scene. I love the description of a first kiss!
Oh my Godddd, this was awesome. Perfect. :D I was pretty much smiling with her, haha.
I love how your writing is sprinkled throughout with humor, like "This sounded so much less lame in my head" or "But obviously I haven’t been kissing the right people."
I agree with V, the line "I try to stay away from being on fire." just made me snort.Loved the chemistry between them, felt natural.
I heart sexual tension in YA :D This is great!! PS Titles are my favorite thing about writing, I usually come up with a title, then the story! LOL
I love this! And I agree the chemistry between them feels natural.I also love this line: "I mean, I try to stay away from being on fire."Great snip!
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