Tuesday, December 1, 2009

Teaser Tuesday

Thanks for commenting, everyone!

15 comments:

VĂ©ro said...

ohhhh I love the fire reference!!!

Lee Bross said...

Oooooh nice K!!! And when you need a beta ;)

LizPage said...

This captures a teenage girls feelings perfectly! So innocent and new while exciting.

V said...

<3 this line:

"I mean, I try to stay away from being on fire."

Hee hee hee.

Laura McMeeking said...

Love all the inner talk about the fire and how she's feeling and how it's new. This was such a throwback to my teen years! Ok, well, maybe I didn't get kissed like that as a teen, but the excitement was there!

La-La-La-Laurie said...

Ah, I love this! You can feel the sexual tension between the MC and Grayson and I love a confident guy. Perfect.

Becca said...

Dude. I love how he's overly confident. "You're welcome." BAHAHAHA

And I loved the "This sounded so much less lame in my head" line. :D

Amanda said...

Really good kiss scene. I'm pretty sure I could feel it too =]

houndrat said...

This was fun! And really enjoyed your MC's voice--very teen and uncertain! :)

corrinejackson said...

This is such a sweet scene. I love the description of a first kiss!

Sumayyah said...

Oh my Godddd, this was awesome. Perfect. :D I was pretty much smiling with her, haha.

Deniz Kuypers said...

I love how your writing is sprinkled throughout with humor, like "This sounded so much less lame in my head" or "But obviously I haven’t been kissing the right people."

Leah Michelle said...

I agree with V, the line "I try to stay away from being on fire." just made me snort.
Loved the chemistry between them, felt natural.

Paranormalchick said...

I heart sexual tension in YA :D This is great!!

PS Titles are my favorite thing about writing, I usually come up with a title, then the story! LOL

Raven said...

I love this!

And I agree the chemistry between them feels natural.

I also love this line: "I mean, I try to stay away from being on fire."

Great snip!