Sunday, January 3, 2010

This no kissing teaser business...

Thanks for the comments, everyone!

16 comments:

Amna said...

"Disappointment settled like a boulder in my stomach." I loved that line!

And damn Bridget and Earl!

Leah Michelle said...

These No kissing blogs are frustrating!! Damn you, Bridget and Earl!! Ah, sexual tension, I can't get enough of you.

Rachele Alpine said...

Kaitlin! You won a pair of writer's gloves on my blog!!! E-mail me your address when you get a chance. :)

Rachele (rachelealpine@gmail.com)

www.freckle-head.blogspot.com

Medeia Sharif said...

Ah, frustration on both sides for the reader and the characters. Nicely done.

Jenny said...

Ah, that was brilliant- awesome tension!

Becca said...

I agree with Amna--damn Bridget and Earl!! Gahh *grumbles* ^.^

Krista Ashe said...

HAHA, yeah, I second those crashers Briget and Earl! LOL

I loved these lines:

“Is that not what you wanted to hear? You know all my deepest darkest thoughts now, there’s nothing else. But if you want, I can start giving you continuous updates so you won’t feel left out of my head, even though it’s not like you’d ever do the same in return.”


Nice as always!

J.S. Wood said...

I'm coming to kick Bridget and Earl's butts!

Great job!

Lia Victoria said...

Bridegt. And. Earl.
AHH!
Lovely job on evoking frustration... in a good way :D

Deniz Kuypers said...

You excel at writing dialogue. This flowed really well--as usual!

Stephanie Jenkins said...

*sighs* “What are you thinking?” I asked, suddenly desperately curious. “Right now, what are you thinking?”<---- That seriously made me sigh (the good kind). Awesome writing and wonderful teaser, even though I wanted them to kiss :P

Angie said...

I really loved the last line too. Nice tease!

V said...

My thoughts at the end of this? "DAMMIT, Bridget and Earl! Get OUT so they can KISS!" And I don't even know Bridget and Earl.

Yeah, that pretty much says it all, I think. :-)

Bee said...

Damn, damn, damn!
Just let them kiss for goshsake!
I like the intensity. And Dusty is an unique name :D

Kathy Bradey said...

Nice... this is a tension-fest :) I love how at the end she's asking what he's thinking about. Typical girl thing. And then... damn! Why do people always interrupt at inappropriate times?

Karla Calalang said...

I love the last line! Darn distractions! haha