Tuesday, June 15, 2010

Teaser Tuesday

Thanks for reading, everyone! Your comments are great :)

25 comments:

LM Preston said...

I love teasers. This one kept me wanting to read more. I liked the dialogue and the teasing between your tew characters.

Kara said...

You do dialogue very well :)

Cheyanne said...

I love the chemistry between these two. And I loved this line: “I’ll stay awake and worry about things we can’t control, while you sleep.”

I need someone to tell me that, I'm always worrying about things I can't control!

Phoebe said...

Oh, awesome.

One of my common gripes with high fantasy is that the quests never seem quite arduous enough--as if the characters are just on a fun camping trip. You really let us feel the exhaustion here!

V.M.Pettingill said...

LOVE the chemistry between Even and Briar... but then I pretty much love Briar :)

Becca Rogers said...

Love high fantasy! I'm curious as to what it's about now. *winkwinknudgenudge* And I have to agree with everyone else--love the chemistry. :D

Will I get to read this? :)))

Karla Nellenbach said...

nice tease! I really like Briar ;) and i like the touch of tension you have, not just between the characters but the constant worry about rations and water supply. more please!

Kristin Miller said...

I love the sweetness through tension here. Great manipulative (in a good way) technique! Can't wait to read more about these characters, fer sure.

Abby Stevens said...

I love high fantasy, too. And I love Briar's name. Can't wait for another teaser! Any ideas for titles that you are playing with?

Horserider said...

Aw I love your characters, especially Briar. He seems like a sweetheart. =D

Kirsten said...

This is cute -- and I love the name Briar. How creative!

Ellen said...

Great dialogue! And you get a sense of the bigger problems even from this tiny snippet, and even though this seems to be a (brief?) moment of calm in the storm :)

Caroline Tung Richmond said...

Oh, I really loved the dialogue in this piece! Like Ellen said above, it really gives me a great sense of what's going on and what youl're characters are all about. Would love to read more!

Kate Hart said...

I love the "strip of leather" and "irritability in her bones" lines.

houndrat said...

I love Briar. Great dialogue here plus, love the bits of description! :D

Kristin Briana Otts said...

I LOLed at that last piece of dialogue. :D

Bri said...

This is adorable and made me sqee lots :) Awesome dialogue!

deltay said...

Awesome diction!

Angelica R. Jackson said...

Yes, as much as I love high fantasy, most examples could use more jokes! Hope your characters keep their pact.

And I just saw your announcement of your engagement hidden in another post, congrats! I proposed to my husband, so extra bonus points to your guy for getting it right!

J.S. Wood said...

I loved this snip and especially her description of feeling "like a strip of leather"

Vee said...

I loved the flow of this, the dialogue was really brilliant, too but for me what made this was the way everything effortlessly slid into everything else esp in those first two paras. Awesome suspense in "if they actually were headed toward something other than their deaths"

Ellen said...

P.S. - I gave you a blog award :)

Remilda Graystone said...

I love this. It flowed so well and the dialogue sounded so natural. This was great!

Karla Calalang said...

The dialogue is really good here! Awesome tease! I love it :D

Glen Akin said...

This is really great. Loved the dialogue and the characters. I'm actually wondering where they're climbing to and why your MC would think some of her companions would betray her.... Suspense!