Thanks for reading, everyone! Your comments are great :)
I love teasers. This one kept me wanting to read more. I liked the dialogue and the teasing between your tew characters.
You do dialogue very well :)
I love the chemistry between these two. And I loved this line: “I’ll stay awake and worry about things we can’t control, while you sleep.”I need someone to tell me that, I'm always worrying about things I can't control!
Oh, awesome.One of my common gripes with high fantasy is that the quests never seem quite arduous enough--as if the characters are just on a fun camping trip. You really let us feel the exhaustion here!
LOVE the chemistry between Even and Briar... but then I pretty much love Briar :)
Love high fantasy! I'm curious as to what it's about now. *winkwinknudgenudge* And I have to agree with everyone else--love the chemistry. :DWill I get to read this? :)))
nice tease! I really like Briar ;) and i like the touch of tension you have, not just between the characters but the constant worry about rations and water supply. more please!
I love the sweetness through tension here. Great manipulative (in a good way) technique! Can't wait to read more about these characters, fer sure.
I love high fantasy, too. And I love Briar's name. Can't wait for another teaser! Any ideas for titles that you are playing with?
Aw I love your characters, especially Briar. He seems like a sweetheart. =D
This is cute -- and I love the name Briar. How creative!
Great dialogue! And you get a sense of the bigger problems even from this tiny snippet, and even though this seems to be a (brief?) moment of calm in the storm :)
Oh, I really loved the dialogue in this piece! Like Ellen said above, it really gives me a great sense of what's going on and what youl're characters are all about. Would love to read more!
I love the "strip of leather" and "irritability in her bones" lines.
I love Briar. Great dialogue here plus, love the bits of description! :D
I LOLed at that last piece of dialogue. :D
This is adorable and made me sqee lots :) Awesome dialogue!
Yes, as much as I love high fantasy, most examples could use more jokes! Hope your characters keep their pact.And I just saw your announcement of your engagement hidden in another post, congrats! I proposed to my husband, so extra bonus points to your guy for getting it right!
I loved this snip and especially her description of feeling "like a strip of leather"
I loved the flow of this, the dialogue was really brilliant, too but for me what made this was the way everything effortlessly slid into everything else esp in those first two paras. Awesome suspense in "if they actually were headed toward something other than their deaths"
P.S. - I gave you a blog award :)
I love this. It flowed so well and the dialogue sounded so natural. This was great!
The dialogue is really good here! Awesome tease! I love it :D
This is really great. Loved the dialogue and the characters. I'm actually wondering where they're climbing to and why your MC would think some of her companions would betray her.... Suspense!
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